Minecraft username: Ronnie21093 Full Name: Henil Inari Gender: Female Age: 23 Date of birth: August 16th, 2382S Place of birth: Slums of the Mainland capital Religious Belief: Phaedron Job: Thief (Formerly) Merchant Signature Item: "Dagger of Caring" On the cold night of August 16th, 2382S, a daughter was born in the dark slums to a pair of thieves who they named Henil. Throughout most of her childhood, Henil was trained to be a thief that could move through the shadows quickly and silently just like her parents so that she could help those in the slum survive through the wealth her family brought. She finally got a true taste of theft at the age of 14, where she was tasked with stealing some apples from a passing merchant. After managing to steal the apples from the merchant, for the next four years her quick thinking and swift feet helped many desperate people in the slums survive, whether it be from the food she brought or the clothes. Though at the age of 18, she was nearly caught when she tried to steal clothes from a warehouse that she thought was lightly guarded. Att that point, she decided to change her life for the better. After a few years of saving up, she was able to buy a ticket to Elpida, where she intended to start her journey as a merchant. "Must you truly go?" Her father asked, clutching her hand tightly. "I am sorry, father, but I must. I can't continue this life forever." Helin replied, holding back her tears. "But what of the people of the slums? I am too old to provide them clothes or food." "Don't worry, father. I will send some of my money to you so you can get food and clothes for them. For now, you can use what remains of my money here to provide for them." "Alright. Be careful out there, Henil. You will always have a home here." Henil's father placed his hand on her shoulder, unable to hold back his tears anymore. "I will, father. You have my word." Henil nodded as she gave her father one big hug before leaving. A few hours later, Henil was outside the capital, staring back at it. "Farewell. And thanks for all the adventures." She said as she turns around and begins her trip to her transport to Elpida, ready to begin her journey. This is where her story begins...
Welcome to the server! Very nice story! I see no problems with it other than it being maybe a bit short. Alir99 will be on sometime tomorrow to take a look at this.
Now that i look at it again, there is a problem with his birth date. If she's 23 years old then she would have been born in the year 2382S (the S stands for "Years Since the founding of Patraeia")
Greetings! This date does not exist in the Elpidan calendar. We have B (Before the founding Patraeia) and S (Since the founding of Patraeia). Also try and add a bit more regarding your character's backstory and past and hopefully we'll approve it as soon as possible Best of luck!
Some ideas: How was she trained/raised? How was her first assignment? How did it go? what did she steal? What was so special about nearly being caught? cant have been the first time she had a near miss. Maybe it wasnt a near catch. she was actually caught and managed to wiggle her way out of the rusty cuffs just in time but people knew now who she was so she had to run?
