Biography of Lucas Aethos (Wr4k3r's Chr.)

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  1. Wr4K3r

    Wr4K3r Verified Traveler

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    Character Overview:
    Name: Lucas Aethos
    Age: 22
    Gender: Male
    Birthplace: Small town on the Mainland
    Date of birth: August 21, 2383S
    Skills: Trained assassin, blacksmithing, baking(taught by his mother)
    Job: Weapon and armor smith, possible baker.
    Signature item: Hand-forged dagger he named Etherium
    God he worships: Phaedron

    Background:
    Lucas was born in a small town on the Mainland. His father was a member of an assassin's guild, and his mother was a baker. Being the son of an assassin was very strange for Lucas, his father often had to leave unexpectedly, and frequently came home injured. He tried not to ask too many questions as he didn’t want to up set his father. Then, when Lucas was 10 years old, his mother was killed by bandits. They had ambushed he on her way home, and her injuries were so severe that she passed away. After his mother's death, grief-stricken Lucas decided to finally talk to his father about the guild. He told his father he wanted to be just like him so that other people’s family didn’t meet the same fate as his mother has. His father agreed, on the condition he only use what he learned to defend others, not to hurt. Lucas trained for six years. In the first two years he was taught by the guilds elders, they taught him about the guild’s belief in Phaedron, and about the first assassin to be blessed by Phaedron. He had found a religious manuscript and prayed to Phaedron before departure, his skills were amplified and he later dedicated his life to telling others about what had happened. The remaining years of Lucas’s training were devoted to honing his combat skills and agility. He learned how to defend himself with weapons like daggers, spears, and axes, as well as common tools, such as hammers, and shovels. He was also taught ranged combat and honed his bow skills to a fine edge. The final task he was given was to build his own weapon. This test was a traditional rite of passage in the guild. Lucas chose to forge a small dagger. It took him four days, when it was finished he named it Etherium, after the shadows where he always found comfort.
    Lucas was 16 now and for the next 4 years he devoted his life to protecting the people who could not protect themselves. He had just turned 20 when he heard that people were traveling to Elpida to seek new lives. He decided it was time to move on with his own life, and after saving his money for a year, he said goodbye to his home town and departed.
    At the outset of his journey, he decided that he will put his previous life behind him for the moment and try to earn an honest living. The last four years of fighting had taken a large toll on his body. Then he remembered how he had made tools for the people in his home town when he wasn’t fighting. He had always liked the idea of working in the forge, and he was pretty good at it too. He decided that, when he got to Elpida, he would look for work as an apprentice blacksmith. He knew that his unique upbringing would create some challenges but that’s a chance he was willing to take.
     
    Last edited: Dec 21, 2019
  2. eragon43

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    Welcome to the server! This is I good start to your bio but there are a few problems with it. Firstly, if your character is 20 years old i think he would have been born in the year 2385S (the S stands for since the founding of Patraeia). Lastly, you bio is a bit short but it shows a lot of promise. You'll need to elaborate a bit more on your story.
    These are some useful links for writing your bio:
    https://minecraftfrontiers.com/forums/threads/recommended-character-biography-layout.156/
    https://minecraftfrontiers.com/forums/threads/writing-a-biography-guide.153/
    Also feel free to check out some of the approved bios for some inspiration:
    https://minecraftfrontiers.com/forums/section/character-bios.40/
    If you have any questions or if you need help with some ideas feel free to contact me, org36, Alir99 or any other member of staff. The discord server is also always open.
     
  3. Alir99

    Alir99 The Guy Who Does Stuff Moderator Community Team

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    Hello and welcome :D

    Good start to your bio but like eragon said, its a bit short and the date of birth needs to be changed. Your character is also an assassin so will probably not fit in Elpida well, but that's entirely up to you. Also please add your MC username.

    Best of luck and let us know when you've changed it :D
     
  4. Wr4K3r

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    I’ve made few changes. Let me know if anything else needs fixing
     
  5. eragon43

    eragon43 Known Citizen Ambassador

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    The changes you made are good, but it' still a bit too short. Could your write at least 1 more paragraph?
    Some inspiration:
    How was he raised, being the son of an assassin must have been special?
    How did his father react to the murder of his mother?
    How was he trained?
    Why does he want to live an honest live?
     
  6. Wr4K3r

    Wr4K3r Verified Traveler

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    Ah ok. Thanks for the tips
     
  7. eragon43

    eragon43 Known Citizen Ambassador

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    Very good!
    This is a nice bio: Approved!
     
  8. Alir99

    Alir99 The Guy Who Does Stuff Moderator Community Team

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    @Wr4K3r I am still waiting for your MC username.
     

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