Character bio: zig02

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  1. zig02

    zig02 Traveler

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    • Minecraft username: zig02
    • Character's name: Rowan Greystone, Male, 32 (Born 2373S)
    • Job: Priest (2389S-2397S), Farmer (2399S-current)
    • God character follows: 'Mentus, God of the Sun'
    • Signature Item: An old medallion of Metus, passed down from a mentor. It quotes a line which Metus was supposed to have said, but the translation had been lost in an ancient dialect.
    Life on Mainland: After the assassination of the Emperor in 2397S, Rowan lost faith. As one of Emperor Claudius's personal priests he saw deep regret in his passing. Before Rowan's turn to faith he had little to show for himself, murder and loss plagued his the family name leaving him with no hope. At the festival of light, on the 4th October 2389S, Rowan turned to religion giving, his soul to the gods Legaros and Metus. After working his way up, he was given a position serving as one of the Emperors priest at the age of 29. Whilst not close to the Emperor, Rowan never stopped blaming himself for the assassination as he was with him on that dark day.

    Decision to go to Elpida: After the assassination, Rowan was removed from his position, returning to his low birth roots by decree of the new senate. Rowan had lost faith in his gods but wished for a peaceful life, one with few complications. Elpida seemed to be the oases in the desert for Rowan, so he sold all he owned to travel to the new land - where a new life could be forged away from the old...
     
  2. eragon43

    eragon43 Known Citizen Ambassador

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    Welcome to the server!
    This is a pretty good start to your bio and it's nice to see you read up on our lore. Unfortunatly some problems that need to be changed:
    -You mispelled the name of the God. I think you meant Metus? (God character follows: 'Mentus, God of the Sun')
    -The emperor claudius was killed in 2379S, not 2397S. This also means you would have been 6 years old when this happened, so you'll need to do something about that.
    -We require a full date of birth for your character
    -The story is a bit too short. Could you add a minimum of 2 paragraphs more?
    Some inspiration might be:
    How was he raised?
    Who were his parents?
    Why was his family so bad?
    Why did he turn to religion?
    How did he turn to religion?
    Why did he blame himself for the death (more detail)?
     

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